MarchofthePawns

Mar 22, 2013

^ that. It's long as hell, but I need to see how it is. What can I do to make it much worse.

Cillianonymous

Mar 23, 2013

Holy shit, I thought my profile was long.  I got all the way to the bottom, and it actually wasn't that hard.  There is a great deal going on, but most of its fun.  I'd still tighten it.  Needs to loose some weight and heavy handedness.  Otherwise, its hilarious.  Maybe be nicer to yourself.  Most of us have to sell our soul a little to eat and live somewhere other than a cardboard box.  Don't be too hard on yourself about that.  Add some positive sides of you.  I give it three stars, but only because it needs a massive bit of help selling me on the fact that despite your crazy you're able to be happy and won't make the reader miserable when dating you ... cause you easily seem like you can accomplish all those things, but you aren't saying it outright.

MarchofthePawns

Mar 24, 2013

^right now I'm mostly trying to destroy the self summary part. Idk, not in the mood to be light and happy. Thanks for the critique.

The music link and the last link are the light and fluffy things. Noone clicks them obviously

ippoh

Mar 24, 2013

10/10 edumacate me lol

MarchofthePawns

Mar 24, 2013

ha

add character to your profile.

Start by admitting a minor detail in the private section.

Maybe put what you have done, are doing and want to do in section 2.

Section involving messages should be either open or specific to what you want here. Women may be interested, but that section can turn them off maybe.

Basically add your style of humor to it. It's not a resume or anything that serious. And try not to get too long. Attention spans <0 here.

7Ataraxia

Mar 24, 2013

I like your teeth.

ippoh

Mar 24, 2013

thanks! and thanks at the teeth comment as well lol

MarchofthePawns

Mar 24, 2013

? ok then

caverunner17

Mar 27, 2013

@March -- dude, that's awesome. Too long, but still I was laughing the entire time. 

Cillianonymous

Mar 27, 2013

Pretty good, 7/10


Here is where you lost three points.  It was too clean, both in tone and in what you were saying to the reader.  There is no rough edges to snag the mind's eye and make the reader think.  I'm not saying this is a bad thing, but from my perspective there isn't enough ... danger?  Excitement?  Am I the one being retarded?  Maybe.

MarchofthePawns

Mar 27, 2013

^^ Thanks. Honestly, I'm trying to parody the standard profile most people write. The summary could be killed by clicking on my French link. The rest is just my old profile that I haven't changed yet, so length is a issue,

MarchofthePawns

Jun 15, 2013

CUZ I HATE MYSELF AND HAVE CAP LOCKS ON!

HavocArt

Jun 16, 2013

10/10

Oh my god, I made a profile JUST like this before XD It's still up, I'll have to post from it in here sometime soon. I mean, some things I wrote are almost word for word, lol

MarchofthePawns

Jun 19, 2013

7.5/10.

Cmon I was expecting a bit more random goofiness humor out of you Sir. It's there but it's subtle.

M_ss_ng-L_nk

Jun 19, 2013

0/10.

It's about 20 times too long and full of all sorts of distracting formatting and wordy bullshit, so I didn't even read it. I mean, I guess if you're trying to insulate and protect your virginity by wrapping it in dialogue, then it's a solid 10/10, but as far as sparking romance? No way in hell.

MarchofthePawns

Jun 19, 2013

Appreciate the blunt review. Ironic since I actually have a  conversation going back and forth with 3 women at the moment. All 3 actually liked my profile.

WiMoTh

Jun 19, 2013

9.5/10 because the music didn't last long enough. Absolutely brilliant insight into a chaotic, intelligent mind.

M_ss_ng-L_nk

Jun 19, 2013

^^ Yeah, but of those three, how many are gargling your stuff?

_Lisa__

Jun 20, 2013

10/10, fully filled out profile with humor and honesty :)

NotAdamSandler

Jun 21, 2013

10/10, one of the best profiles on the site.

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